Youth Melody 青春美樂地

題目：
請描述你和家人最難忘的一次親子活動。第一段請說明活動時間、地點、參與對象及活動性質。第二段請說明你為何難忘的原因。文長約120字

恩...
這一篇作文我拿了12分...
加上翻譯的7分...
非選28分我拿19分.......

PO上來的作文是我已經訂正過錯誤的

        Last summer, my family and I went mountain climbing. It was my father's high school class reunion. We went to Lala Mountain to have some interesting activities, such as picking the freshest peaches, which was the most delicious fruit I had ever eaten. We also went to the highest place of the mountain to see the trees of thousand years old.

        The trip was two days short. At the end of the trip, I cried, I didn't wnat to go home so soon. During the two days, I experienced an unforgettable time with the nature. I liked the smell of trees, pesches and the air in the mountain. Even now, I still can't forget all the things in that two short days.



自評
"第二段沒有寫出讓人感動之處...很草率...因為字數已經超過了......"

PS....
我們班的英文手寫不是自己班的英文老師改
而是別的老師和我們老師交換考卷互改
這樣比較公平啦....