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昨天貼上了我高一寫的作文
今天我要貼上同一個題目 但是是高三的我寫的作文
雖然我覺得還是寫的很爛......至少比高一那篇亂七八糟好了啦
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Last Friday, when I was preparing lunch, I felt something odd. It was my little dog, Baby. He seemed to want something to eat, it was impossible to give him the food, of course. Suddenly, I noticed another strange voice, which came from outside the kitchen. I reckoned that it was a thief breaking into the house. While I turned around, a great giant monster was standing in front of me by only two meters, which frightened me a lot. It seemed that the crazy monster wanted to scare me more, but with an individual footstep, I thought it was my boyfriend, John, who hid inside the stupid outfit. As soon as he saw me laugh at him, he took off the mask, and took out a bunch of flowers to give me as a birthday surprise. How sweetie he was that he remembered my birthday! John said that he was sorry to scare me, he hadn't thought that my reaction would be so extreme. Both of us laughed. Baby, who just ate up all the food I had dropped, was also bowwowing like he was happy to us and satisfied with the big surprising meal. All three of us had a perfect day that day, my birthday!
恩........看完之後真的覺得很爛
轉折好硬........結尾句好沒有收場的感覺
中間的故事雖然是用第一人稱寫
可是越看越覺得只是把第三人稱硬是轉成第一人稱寫
埃..................................
阿~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
今天我要貼上同一個題目 但是是高三的我寫的作文
雖然我覺得還是寫的很爛......至少比高一那篇亂七八糟好了啦
題目：
Last Friday, when I was preparing lunch, I felt something odd. It was my little dog, Baby. He seemed to want something to eat, it was impossible to give him the food, of course. Suddenly, I noticed another strange voice, which came from outside the kitchen. I reckoned that it was a thief breaking into the house. While I turned around, a great giant monster was standing in front of me by only two meters, which frightened me a lot. It seemed that the crazy monster wanted to scare me more, but with an individual footstep, I thought it was my boyfriend, John, who hid inside the stupid outfit. As soon as he saw me laugh at him, he took off the mask, and took out a bunch of flowers to give me as a birthday surprise. How sweetie he was that he remembered my birthday! John said that he was sorry to scare me, he hadn't thought that my reaction would be so extreme. Both of us laughed. Baby, who just ate up all the food I had dropped, was also bowwowing like he was happy to us and satisfied with the big surprising meal. All three of us had a perfect day that day, my birthday!
恩........看完之後真的覺得很爛
轉折好硬........結尾句好沒有收場的感覺
中間的故事雖然是用第一人稱寫
可是越看越覺得只是把第三人稱硬是轉成第一人稱寫
埃..................................
阿~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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